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Stone Heart -Pic and Poem by ~CrimsonNightWind:iconCrimsonNightWind:


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Submitted: April 29, 2008
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I made myself a heart of stone
Just so it’d match yours.
I wrapped it in a rock barrier
And made sure it had no doors.

I spackled it together
With bits of grit and grain
Made sure it was reinforced
So it could feel no pain.

But the walls are crumbling
And beginning to fall apart.
And I can feel a dagger
Piercing my stone heart.
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Wow....
Lovely...in a bittersweet way.
Gotta :+favlove: this!
You know, (thinking, my face cradled in my palm, index finger tapping my cheek)
this makes your heart ...alluring.

As you wrote, how did you know when to end?
(because this is..perfect.)
I have issues with ending sometimes....

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xD Wow. Thanks! I don't usually do the romantic poems but this one came to me while I was organizing the stones to take the picture.

I just sort of end where it feels natural. I try to make my poems come full circle and try not to think too much until I start to edit. You just have to end when you run out of things to say or, if you're telling a story, when the story is over. You don't want to force it. Just write until you're finished and then go back and touch everything up in a few rounds of editing. ^^

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*sigh* This is the second time I've done this in two days. I didn't hit the "reply" button before I posted so my answer is on the post below mine...if that makes sense xP

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Don't knock on Death's door.
Ring the doorbell and run away.
Death REALLY hates that.

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Agreed...It's the editing that gets me. I think of 3 more words that describe the feeling..whatever that may be, and want to "stuff" them all in...and then it gets bloated...rather than streamlined and polished....

Thanks for your insight....Thank you.

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Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.

T. S. Eliot

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no problem...it happens to me as well...

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Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.

T. S. Eliot

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lol. Ja, you want to be careful with that. Prose is where many words are good. You can sort of ramble on, weave a web, that sort of thing. But in poetry you need to find the one word that sums it up and ties it together. Remember, one word can be just as powerful as ten of them. Just so long as the one word is the right word. ^^

No problemo.

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very lovely poem and picture

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Thank you. xD Glad you enjoyed it.

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Don't knock on Death's door.
Ring the doorbell and run away.
Death REALLY hates that.

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your welcome :D

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